No Problem mate its your character.

so how's tha new chapter coming?

Xenomorph character.


Known as: The Wraith
Height: 8.2 ft
Appearance: Black skin, dark red exoskeleton. Most of the left side of his head is marked by a long scar that was most likely caused by a combistick. Various scars on the chest. One of the backside tubes was partially blown away by a close-by explosion, probably from a plasma bolt.
History: Many predator clans have heard of this Xenomorph throughout the last 700 years. Some say that he is the reason for many xenomorph escapes, leading to clanship crashes and hive establishments on various planets. He is known by most to be the final result of a genetical enhancement process with the use of several substances meant to accelerate growth and developement with the purpose of making an even stronger opponent, but he is actually only a midstage, as his developement was cut short when he was set loose. The real "final result" was the one to let him loose. Notes about the "final result" were found at the crashsite of a clanship that had investigated the massacre. They noted that it was 10 ft tall, looked different than most Xenomorphs in many ways, and that it took at least 4 combisticks through the neck and all the way through the head. They also noted that, while all the other Predators had clearly been killed by the "final result", the elder seemed to have been killed by another, smaller senomorph, while he was killing the Final. Soon after takeoff, the ckanship`s xenomorph cargo was set loose. A holographic reconstruction showed that some predators were killed by an unusually looking Xenomorph. It was called the Wraith, being considered a shadow of what the Final had been. The Wraith was traked over 53 years, as clans tried to kill him, but he had already memorised most ship models and knew how to sabotage them and hide too well for it to even be detected by most sensors. The tracking was abandoned in favour of more important matters and his location is currently unknown. For most, the Wraith has become somewhat a myth. Others speculate that it died, even though he was given the medium lifespan of a Yautja. Over the last 73 years only 8 clanship crashes have been associated with the Wraith, the last one having happened over 16 years ago.
Personality and fighting style: This Xenomorph rarely appears in recordings, as he is known to attack only when he finds a single opponent, otherwise he will stay hidden and wait. He either waits for the opponent to attack, studying his moves, then counterattacks efficiently, mostly using his tail for offence and all the other members for deffense - or he descends his tail from a vent, right through the opponent`s head, before he is even noticed. He doesn`t make rushed moves in a battle, has quick reflexes and a strong exoskeleton. It is unknown if he ever submits to an alpha male, but he has never been known to act as one. In 3 of the the 28 recordings of him, the Wraith comes out of the vents only to set loose the Xenomorph cargo and then to deliver a final blow to the most experienced hunter of the clanship. In other 8 recordings he attacks with the group, at a point where it appeares that the aliens are going to be wiped out. In the rest of them, he either only kills one or two solitary bypassing Yautja or stays hidden, only revealing his tail or face from time to time as he moves around the ship.

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Sorry for it being so none-canon, if you don`t wanna use it i won`t really care, i just never made a xenomorph character history before, and you can clearly see why...

Can I submit another character please?Its an alien king.

Can I submit another character please?Its an alien king.

Okay give me name and a short desciption of the character.

NAME:"The king" by the marines PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION:you know that character XenoHunter (which is me,ecxept im using a diffrent computer)submitted? well this is his mortal enemy.The King is predalien and it killed the predator that saved him from death.Well,in that very same battle stalker ripped off one of the kings mandibles,which is how stalker got blooded.Te kig has four arms and a tentacle sticking out of its chest,with asickle like attachment on the end.It has four horns and can spit acid.The king and stalker have a long history and is the only reason stalker came on the mission.He dies along with stalker in the explosion.

Need....new.....chapter!

hay dude on Page 26 first comment you soad youd edit the third passage were i was in it cus you said i was sopposed to be with Devastater and they other guy but im still not in there. plus i dont get it is says first passage second passage and then third passage then the begging. whats with that?

It's just an intro man don't get tripped out

I'm sorry guys I havn't been on or posting the story. One of my friends past away and Its really rough. But I will try to edit that and I posted the beginning so you guys understand how the story started I'm close to finishing the second chapter, its the Preparation. Also Rayne I'll edit that.
EDIT: Its fixed Rayne your leading Venom and Devastator to take charge to the Preds hope its better. But now I will be posting by chapters now however progress may become slow from school and work but I'll get it up, just be patient.

k just had a few questions im not tripping saint just curiese if you now me rthen you should now thats one of my qualletys. srry for your friend SS that must really suck im going to read the passage.

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Here is Chapter Two Enjoy. I may add more a little later.

Chapter Two
Preparation

“Okay Frost how is preparation going, are we making progress?†Mitchell asked.
“Yes Sir right now we are loading up our armory, what weapons do you suggest we bring aboard with us.†Frost asked.
“I really don’t have any specific I do request you bring our M41A Pulse Rifles and keep magazines handy.†Mitchell responded.
“Yes Sir we have our drop ship prep instructions finished, here take a look.â€Â
Mitchell followed Frost down to the docking bay to their ships. He noticed everything really was complete and done correctly, “well done marines.†he said.
Frost announced to Ethers, “Set up the pulse rifles for use we are going to be using them a lot over this expedition.â€Â
Yes Sir is there any other specifics to load up onto the ships Sir?â€Â
No not yet Corporal, however I would suggest loading up some grenades, M16 Rifles and some Magnum handguns.“
Ethers Saluted, â€ÂYes Sir.“
Mitchell asked, I heard that you have completed our drop ship preparation instructions completed.
“Yes Lieutenant Mitchell, they are completed.†Frost answered.
“Okay may I see it.†Mitchell asked.
“Oh I’m sorry right away Sir, sorry to keep you waiting.“ Frost responded.
“Its not a problem Sergeant,†Mitchell responded.
Mitchell examined the document and grinned, “perfect Frost I’m impressed Well Done.â€Â
“Thank you Sir we will return turn to our work stations, Alright men continue to your work stations and complete our preparations.†Sergeant Frost announced.
Frost saluted to Mitchell then turned and headed toward the two advanced military starships. The ships stood abnormally large fitting hundreds of soldiers. DarkSeige 1 and DarkSeige 2 were large carriers that Frost entered DarkSeige 1 to see mostly everything set and ready for takeoff. “Okay Marines we have 48 hours until departure for this mission once you have completed preparation get some rest and be prepared.†Frost announced.
“Yes be sure to be prepared because we don’t know if this is mission will be dangerous. “Hey, hey, hey come here we got something,†Dr. Khazmar shouted from across the room.
“What is it,†Mitchell asked sprinting to Khazmar. We got a huge signal above the atmosphere.â€Â
“Yeah but what the hell is it.†Mitchell demanded.
“We have no idea but lets take a look at it.†Khazmar announced.
“He turned on his computer. It flickered and then sprung to life.â€Â
“What the hell!†They both shouted simultaneously.
Where is it? I don’t see anything damn it! Mitchell shouted.
Khazmar kept typing commands into his computer but the negitive replies just kept on coming. He finally came up with a readout and ran to Mitchell and shouted.
“This computer readout says that whatever it is, it has a mass roughly a quarter of our moon.â€Â
“Holy Shit! but what the hell is it?†Mitchell demanded.
“I told you Lieutenant I don’t know.†Khazmar responded.
Well keep trying I’m sure we can come up with something Mitchell ordered.
“What if its aliens Sir! Private Gomez exclaimed.
Don’t be ridiculous Gomez, Aliens aren’t real now get back to work.†Mitchell ordered.
He turned and walked away in frustration and headed toward his office. He sat at his desk and opened up his Mission files.
United States Marine Core
Niobrara Wyoming
Current Mission: Unidentified Phenomenon on LV-862
Mission Details: N/A
Mitchell began to type.
Phenomenon in space: Mass size a quarter of the moon.
He dropped his head to the surface of his desk in frustration. Corporal Ethers was standing in Mitchell’s doorway. “What is it Sir?â€Â
“Its just not easy any more, I know of nothing that this could be and quite frankly I don’t know if anyone in this base is even ready to do this mission.†Mitchell explained.
“Sir we are always ready for anything that awaits us Sir.†Ethers replied.
“Okay Corporal return to your work stations and help the others finish so they can be ready for this.â€Â
“Very well Sir I’ll be on my way.†Ethers saluted and returned.
“Oh yes Ethers we are leaving tomorrow 06:00, make sure yourself and everyone else are prepared. Have Frost do this as well.†Mitchell added.
“Very well,†Ethers left.
Frost came up to Ethers and said preparation is complete.†Frost announced.
“Very well go tell the Lieutenant.†Ethers replied.
“I will don’t worry about it.†Frost assured.
Frost exited the prep room and entered Mitchell’s office. He knocked. Yes come in, Mitchell answered.
“Sir our preparation is complete Lieutenant.†Frost exclaimed.
“Great okay tell everyone to get rest and I will brief them at 05:00 tomorrow.†Mitchell ordered.
“Very well Lieutenant.†Frost saluted to Mitchell and returned back to the Prep room.
“Ok marines may I have your attention.†Frost announced.
All the marines paused there work and glared up to Frost and DeRosa.
DeRosa signaled to Frost to begin, “Okay marines I want to congratulate you on your fantastic worth ethic and your completion on our preparation. We should all be up and ready at 05:00 I suggest you prepare yourselves and get plenty of rest. Expect this to be dangerous because it could be and I don’t want to go under the impression it won’t be. The soldiers spread in different directions to their quarters to get a good night sleep.
Drifting through the reaches of space was the hulking mass of ship where these Hunters would live. It was believed that these Hunters are nomadic who would be separated into clans or groups. This particular clan was called Hunter’s Moon. Preparation was being done the warriors packing their weapons, preparing to seek the skulls of their prey. Sertolic a well respected warrior paced his way to his Elder Splaxtor. Sertolic bowed his head and stood next to Splaxtor and the two glared into the dark skies of space. He asked his Elder, “Nain-de?â€Â
“Nain-de Thwei of Oomans and Kainde Amedha.†Splaxtor responded.
Sertolic roared and returned to his quarters to inform the others. He entered the quarters and saw his brethren preparing he was surprised but then began to equip his weapons along with the others. Meanwhile the ship began to hover over the atmosphere of LV-862. But the ship came to a sharp halt and just remained there for reasons unknown.
Back to the military base the marines were at rest ready to sleep and await the departure of their ships and to discover what this so called phenomenon was. One of the quarters was shared by Corporal Ethers, Pvt. Gomez, Lieutenant DeRosa, Sgt. Frost and Pvt. Destebro. They were preparing to go to sleep. “Hey Gomez!†Destebro called out.
“Yeah buddy what’s going on?†Gomez replied.
“Are you scared man?†Destebro asked.
“No why? What about you?†Gomez asked.
No just kind of worried. What if there are aliens? Destebro explained.
“There aren’t any aliens buddy. Okay I can guarantee that, but come on we got to get to sleep we’re the only ones awake.†Gomez assured Destebro.
“Alright lets go.†Destebro added.
The two then began to sleep on their beds and shut their eyes in a matter of minutes. All the marines then were sleeping and awaited their departure for their mission to find out what this phenomenon was.

But would they survive the mission was the question…
The Predators continued to prepare themselves it would be hours until the Hunt was to begin. Splaxtor entered the Warriors corridor and saw his clan preparing for their hunt. He grinned he saw blades extending and the roars of them as well. Sertolic approached Splaxtor, “Will you be joining us?†he asked.
“Possibly.†Splaxtor replied. But keep preparing it will not be long until the oomans arrive.†Splaxtor added.
Then more of the monstrous warriors approached their elder in curiosity. One of them stood up above all he was young but was blind. The name Zenwi-Sai he was born blind but constructed a mask strengthening his senses. Splaxtor summoned him, Zenwi-Sai then approached him. “Are you ready for the Nain-de Thwei?â€Â
Zenwi-Sai roared in excitement for a response. He and Splaxtor turned to the others Xerax, Guan Thwei, Asudak, Diruxis and Sertolic all roared pulling out more weapons they began to put on their armor. They were set to head for their stasis pods and the ship was set to land on the surface of the planet. These Warriors were fully prepared to move on to claim the skulls of honorable prey…

Cool!I cant wait until the next chapter.Is The king gonna murder a bunch of marines?(P.S a little more content on the Preds would be nice,They are the main characters,right?)

Hell yeah they are suppose to be. Don't worry they will be heavily concentrated on when they and the marines reach LV-862. I'm editing it now it will be up soon.
EDIT: I forgot some thing in that last passage but I added them, when I typed it was pretty long but I have more to add as well but there it is.

Oh I just wanted to state that right now I have a request with balatu not hunter's moon. It's all good either way, just stating. I noticed that in the beggining, so yeah.

Oh that doesn't matter its just with my old account I've been in Hunter's Moon for about 2 years or something like that I don't know but yeah thats why I used Hunter's Moon. Its my home hell yeah lol.

good chapter SS and sorry about ur friend, thats stuffed up that he died.

Sorry about your friend, Shadow. One of mine passed away about two years ago and I took it badly.

Anyway, nicel ooking story here. Might read it soon, sounds interesting.

Damnit why does that never happen to me?? It would be an interestin experience, i mean, my grandmother died, yeah, who cares, she was old, she had it coming... One of my teachers died, party!!! But if a fried of mine died i wonder if i`d feel sorry or miss him or anything, it would be interestin to see how i react and i would know how to keep myself from reacting...


Well in any case i wish that because of your friend`s death, you won`t have any problems you`ll regret having had in the future... I`m not... really good with these things... sorry...