ok Shadow Warrior, one thing though, here's an old topic that has very detailed tips for RPG's: http://www.alienvspredator2.com/comments/4726.html
but I know that it can be quite daunting to read through all that, lol, so yeah, I'll give u some pointers.
First of all, try to detail ur posts as much as possible. Even if it's only something simple that is happening, like say, u punched an alien in the head, u wouldn't write "I punched the alien in the head" u'd write "Shadow Warrior clenched his scaly fist, the deadly creature screeched & leapt forth, talons beared & ready to spill the blood of it's prey. The hunter struck out as the sound of cracking chitchin echoed throughout the immediate vicinity, the xenomorph reeled back as it was met with a solid blow to the head, knocking it clean off it's feet."
Also, it's prefferable to write it from a 3rd person perspective, rather than a 1st person one. It's really your choice, but I prefer 3rd person narration. For example, saying "I" is telling it from 1st person, while saying your characters name as if u were narrating the story is 3rd person.
Getting the first post in a battle can sometimes be crucial to victory, not always, but most of the time. As it is more than likely u will get to the 4 post limit first. Also, try to be fair in fights, that means that u can't just beat the living hell out of ur opponent without takin damage, or ignorin damage they do to u in their posts.
Also, try to match ur RPG characters fighting abilities with the stats in ur profile, that means, realistically for eg. if u were fighting someone with 5 more strength points than u, then u would more likely get overpowered in the fight.
Also, dying can sometimes be a touchy issue for some who never like to lose. the fact is, everyone has to die in RPG's at some point, if u survive one RPG, that means u
must die in the next one. Think of it as adding more drama to the story if u die, it mixes things up a bit & makes the storyline more interesting.
Ok dude, there u go, hope this will help u, come next RPG, see u in ther combat zone dude.